She stands in the shadows of the hidden cove, pebbles clacking quietly under her bare feet, salt water lapping at her toes.
“What does she want?” the ocean wonders. “Is she here as supplicant, queen, or warrior?”
She draws an apple from her heavy cloak, then lets the cloak slide from her shoulders. It dissolves into the shadows as its power releases. The apple glints wickedly.
“Ah, she comes as all.”
Naked in the scarlet sunrise, she lifts the apple to her lips, mumbling a spell. So quiet, so weary of the wickedness in a world gone sour and poisonous, but the ocean hears these words and more, and accepts: As we do pray it, so mote it be.
She takes a bite, swallows, and drops, with the poisoned apple, into the shallows. The waves surge, accepting both poison and cure.
An uneven balance, but these are desperate times.
© Liz Husebye Hartmann (2019)
Carrot Ranch Prompt (08/08/2019): In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a poisoned apple. Let’s explore dark myth. Deconstruct the original or invent something new. Negotiate the shadows, shed light, but go where the prompt leads you!
Midtown Writer’s Group Prompt: 4 mins on “The waves surge”
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You did a good job reducing the longer version. I like the fuller, richer details of the longer one but the 99-words gets to it.
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Thanks…it was challenge.But then, that’s why we’re here yes? 🙂
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For the challenge! I like to tell people that 99-word stories are so easy to write anyone can do it, but 99-word stories can also challenge the best of writers.
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Cool.
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Thanks!
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Oh, Liz. That’s fantastic. Love it.
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Thank you. Happy to please!
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Good job, Liz! This was so poignant and very realistic. You paint a very complete picture with just a few words.
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Thanks, Ann!
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Very cool 🙂
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Thanks, Leanne!
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