Visa

The challenge? Write a story in 6 sentences, no more & no less, and if you’d like, share your creation or just visit and comment on others’ ideas, with GirlieOnTheEdge, Denise. The prompt is “VISA”, and here’s where you join the party: Six Sentence Stories  

***(And remember, I write fiction, so…)***

He glanced at the packet of papers, held between his thumb and first two fingers. “Well MY lawyer told me these don’t have to be returned until AFTER 30 days,” he sneered, releasing his fingers and scattering the pages across the floor.

“It says right there what the due date for your response is, and it’s not like you didn’t know this was coming, because we talked about it in marriage counseling just last week,” she replied, forcing down her nausea and adding, “If my lawyer doesn’t hear from you or your lawyer by noon on that date, I will have to have you served by a third party. Please don’t make me do that.”

He growled and made to get up from his easy chair, and laughed as she jumped away.

Having delivered the official notice of separation and divorce — the papers her visa to another, safer country not carpeted in eggshells and broken beer bottles – she snatched up her purse and car keys.

She was grateful to her parents for having agreed to watch the kids for a few days, but they’d be surprised when she showed up seeking sanctuary at their home.

© Liz Husebye Hartmann (2023)

27 thoughts on “Visa

  1. You communicated the situation (fear on the wife’s part and aggression on the part of the husband) very well in just a few lines. Like most others who commented, I especially liked the line about egg shells and beer bottles. But I also loved the ending, where it seemed that she had found a safe place.

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  2. Tense scene, acutely described to the point where I was feeling the anger and the fear of the young woman. I agree with Clark, the phrasing here is brilliant: “safer country not carpeted in eggshells and broken beer bottles”!

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  3. “…safer country not carpeted in eggshells and broken beer bottles

    Hands-down winner of this week’s ‘Damn! Why can’t I come up with lines like this Award’

    very engaging Six!

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  4. Standing up to the bully. And divorcing him to boot (no bad pun intended, lol)
    Well told fictional telling of what is unfortunately a more common scenario than most of us realize.
    Your MC stood her ground in the face of her fear. A courageous first step.

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