The challenge? Write a story in 6 sentences, no more & no less, and if you’d like, share your own creation or just visit and comment on others’ ideas, with GirlieOnTheEdge, Denise. The prompt is “MELANCHOLY”, and here’s where you join the party: Six Sentence Stories
Without a doubt, that was the last straw.
His casual comments about strangers with unflattering hairstyles, alien colored locks, clothes worn too tight or too loose, the ugliness of sparse whiskers on extra chins, jiggling rolls of belly fat, too much makeup or not enough, had escalated over the past month, and his gimlet eye had turned to me though he hadn’t yet uttered his scathing commentary…yet.
And then, like a personal celebration of our three month anniversary of dating, he started in on my elderly and arthritic dog, Mollie, who yes, carried quite a bit of extra weight, but who had also been on to him from day one; she’d never liked him.
The man who never took a good look at himself got stuck fleeing through my front door, my fat but savage collie barking and snapping, and me delivering a final kick that squeezed him through with an emphatic pop and launched him arcing over the steps and onto his hands and knees, where he scraped and rolled down into the street, and kept rolling until he disappeared over the horizon.
And Mollie, my sweet, chubby, melon-collie baby and I strolled down the street in the opposite direction and shared an ice cream (or two) while we watched a live band play funk & blues on a stage at the river’s edge; we may even have danced the sun down.
And as the saying goes, we lived happily ever after.
© Liz Husebye Hartmann (2023)
Ella Fitzgerald ‘My Melancholy Baby’ https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xLTbEC1prcs
Valley of the Trolls 
This is such a powerful story, and it’s so heartbreaking to read. It’s a reminder that we should all be more mindful of our words and how they affect others. Your writing has a way of captivating your readers, Denise! Thank you for sharing.
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Love this!
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I’m glad it hit a good spot!
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The dog knows. My father’s dog never, ever liked any of the girls he brought home to meet his family until he brought my mother over there, and they’ve been married 61 years. The dog knows!
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They do! They know what’s best for the pack!
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This is a Toastmaster’s word of the day – escapade … 🤣 brilliant!
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Good doggie!
(the melon variation on the prompt occurred to me, but, alas I did not have the chops to pull it off. this is half the reason I participate in this ‘hop to learn from my betters. on my behalf:
lol
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Lol…you’re totally worthy!
And the joy of writing this thing was well worth the mild slap on the wrist 😂🐧
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It sounds like he could have lost a pound or two as well. Nice description of getting him through the door and nice phrase: “danced the sun down”.
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Thanks so much, Frank!
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True bliss!
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Truly! Thanks, Reena!
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Haha! Love this story Liz. Mellon- collie is perfect name.
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Thank you. Paints a picture, eh?
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Yes, a fun one.
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Not exactly the prompt word, Liz but “A” for effort and an entertaining story!
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I listened to the sound of the word.
And that’s what I saw and heard.
Woof! 🐾😂
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Oh, no you didn’t!!
I was waiting and wondering but never expected that!
Very funny!
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👻🙉
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