Disappeared 11

Six Sentence Stories

“Oh my God,” Eloise moaned into the top of her knees, body bent into a sitting fetal position and thoroughly defeated by the twins’ repeated singing of the nearly out-of-control Shari Lewis and Friends song; she leaned into a deeper regret at having sent her brother Andrew off to the haunted mansion with only a broken flashlight and a box of three matches, and screamed, “Will you two just shut up?!”

The song stopped, the willow tree ceased its shaking, and Eloise looked up, dumbstruck at the sudden silence. Chuckie and Ducks were still there underneath the tree with her, holding hands, eyes and mouths opened wide in shock.

Ducks looked at Chuckie and said, “She yelled at us, but she never yells at us.”

“Eloise must hate us as much as Mommy and Daddy do,” whimpered Ducks, as two fat tears, one from each twin’s eye, rolled down their plump, red cheeks.

“We just wanted to cheer you up, Weezie!”

© Liz Husebye Hartmann (2022)

The challenge? Write a story in 6 sentences, no more & no less, and if you’d like, share your creation or just visit and comment on others’ ideas, with GirlieOnTheEdge, Denise. The prompt is “CONTROL”, and here’s where you join the party:  Six Sentence Stories

33 thoughts on “Disappeared 11

  1. Yes, how easy it is to misinterpret others’ actions. Nicely shown. I wonder what Eloise’s outburst will lead to now that the twins have shown what they think and feel…


  2. Hey good to see a new face at ‘the Café’
    As someone else mentioned, one of the SSC&B’s distinguishing qualities is something akin to the Uncertainty Principle.
    You can experience it’s ambiance and you can interact with those you meet there… however, one shouldn’t count on doing both at the same time.
    Fun Six

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